Dashing up the stairs to get in line, I was laughing and scrambling as fast as I could. “ Ha ha we’re here,” I said to Athena.
As we were waiting in line more people came up and pushed in. So Athena and I pushed in front of them. The year 7 boys laughed.
“Yeah! “ I said while eagerly waiting for the green light to go on. A flash of green, and with careful aim I slid into the dark tunnel to go down. I was twisting and turning with fear as I was dying to get out. At last I saw a bright light coming towards me. I was full of excitement because I was finally out of the tunnel.
As we were waiting in line more people came up and pushed in. So Athena and I pushed in front of them. The year 7 boys laughed.
“Yeah! “ I said while eagerly waiting for the green light to go on. A flash of green, and with careful aim I slid into the dark tunnel to go down. I was twisting and turning with fear as I was dying to get out. At last I saw a bright light coming towards me. I was full of excitement because I was finally out of the tunnel.
Hey Lesley,
ReplyDeleteGreat work. I loved reading your writing. My favourite part was the first sentence. It really got me hooked in to the story. I can't really think of trying to make this writing better because it was great. Anyways, keep up the good work.
-Mubba
Hello Lesley,
ReplyDeleteWhat great work Lesley you got about the pools. I loved to read more story's of your's and I hope you learn more interesting thing's.